A Scene Description (@korionfray)

So, the writer in my attic, K Orion Fray, sends out a weekly writing inspiration e-mail, which includes a writing prompt.

A prompt from several weeks ago:

Write for ten minutes, and describe something. It can be a person, a place, or and object – but just describe it. Use as many of the senses as you can, and don’t skimp!

Description in line is something I need work at. So I rolled up three random names and a couple random outfits and went to work.

Marje Allise strode into the room, two steps and leagues ahead of Ket Vasquez. She was dressed in k.d. lang chic today, her indigo suit pattered all over with black designs. It didn’t do to look too closely at the patterns, a lesson Kara had learned the hard way.

“All right.” Marje appropriated the nearest chair, swung it around, and plopped down backwards in it, leaning on the headrest. Her hair, for a moment, failed to obey the commands implicit in the styling gel Marje bought in bulk; one cinnamon-colored curl dangled over her patrician nose, softening the Sergeant’s habitual glare. “Give me what you’ve got.”

Behind her, Ket fiddled with the valises, setting them up on the rickety side table, rearranging them, opening and closing them. Even his suit was a pale imitation of Marje’s: black instead of midnight indigo, the patterns grey and mauve instead of black. He was wearing a fedora, as if that helped. At least it covered up his perpetually-tousled hair.

Kira dragged her eyes away from the boy, found them settling on the way the patterns on Marje’s suit traced her broad shoulders, and dragged her eyes away again. The Sergeant had asked her a question. She coughed.

“Ah, yes. What I’ve, that is, what we’ve….”

“Agent.” Marje didn’t need her voice to fill space. Her presence did that all on her own. So her voice was quiet – not a whisper, not the sort of quiet that hid from listeners, just the voice that had no need to raise itself.

“Yessir?” Kira swallowed around a lump in her throat.

A Scene Description
A Place Description
A Deletion

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0 thoughts on “A Scene Description (@korionfray)

  1. Oh, poor Kira! Or is it Kara? (¶ 1 vs. ¶¶ 4, 7) “Yessir” to Marje (¶7): idiom? oops? K_ra still thinking of Ket? Or something that changes one aspect of reality every three paragraphs? 😉

    • The yessir was on purpose, as many futures settings use it as a generic. And K*ra’s name is… whoops. Which do you like better?

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